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I liked this, especially the whole "these two once fought it out". You should write stuff like this more often!

I loved this story!!! I agree with the others that it moved along too quickly, and who was the imaginary friend? Also, the only part that really bugged me was ...

Who is your writing teacher? was okay, but there are a ton of grammar errors. A TON. And I'm not going to fix them all right now. I have to ...

I don't understand everybody saying how awful and boring and "depressing" high school is. I don't care for school, but I love the social interaction and stuff, and it makes ...

Okay, everybody else has taken a long time to nitpick at your piece (especially the grammatical errors, which most people have told you about), but I just want to say ...

First of all, being only fifteen does not help your cause. I was still following along until you said you would refer to yourself as "Lost". No offense, but the ...

Most of it, I liked. I love the last line, because it's exactly how I feel about somebody I know. Great work!

Sounds better. :wink:

I have nothing against a person trying out superheroes (although I tried it once and it didn't work out). However, do you have something against Marvel Comics? Isn't Superman and ...

Alright people, somebody go read my Death at a Funeral story already!! lol... Derek, I have no idea what you're talking about on that first part. The second part you're ...

Please critique and tell me what I can improve! Adrian stared into her grandfather’s casket with mixed emotions. Grief filled her soul, but she didn’t cry. Everybody around her cried, ...

Hey, Aedomir! You reviewed my story, so I decided to come see yours. First of all, this is the first part of your twelve or fourteen parts you've posted on ...

Oh, well, if you have a specific reason for what you did, then don't mind what I'm saying!

First of all, I'm going to say that, for a thirteen-year-old, you're pretty good! The story is fast moving, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. However, it can eventually ...

Thanks guys!!! Today I have to go to a piano audition thing, and then I think I'm going to write another short story (and edit some of the book I've ...