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kirstybree

  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Playtime

    It's a decent poem, but it's nothing more than that to me really. It seems as if it's an outline of a future poem. A skeleton if you will. It ...

    Oct 3, 2007
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Hide and Seek

    Hahaha. this is so cute! I love it :D! The simple basic rhyming works with the whole hide and seek theme. I never would have done something like that. Nice!

    Oct 3, 2007
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: A Prettier Fate

    You had a great start. it was unique and caught my attention. the last three stanza's though were weak and didn't fit in with the first three. I would either ...

    Oct 2, 2007
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Betrayer and the Betrayed

    The title is a little bland. the poem itself is more a thought bubble than a poem to me. Its very simple with no real structure. No flow, or rhythm. ...

    Sep 29, 2007
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: lost between the cracks

    This is a really unique poem, with a detailed choice of language and for that reason it is great. However it confused me, because it's meaning is not all that ...

    Aug 14, 2007
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Child, Child

    It's basic, yes, but beside that I like the style that it is written in. It is not like some of your other poems I have read and that is ...

    Aug 6, 2007
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Visitors

    Okay, I understand that this is a light-hearted and, I am guessing nothing more than your thoughts on paper, because that's exactly what it seems like. There is no really ...

    Aug 6, 2007
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: another untitled

    This poem is extremely basic. It doesn't really say anything other than a guy you loved left you with pain. It's like so many others only re-worded a bit. It ...

    Aug 6, 2007
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Indian Scalps

    I know what this story is based on, I am guessing an hindu priest? That said I am not really sure what you are trying to say with this poem, ...

    Aug 4, 2007
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Untitled (as of now)

    Focusing on everything else but the title is something I myself can relate to. But you should try to come up with one, it helps. And the point of view ...

    Aug 3, 2007
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Bullying

    I agree with the others, this sounds alot more like a thought bubble more than anything and it is a topic tackled many time before. But then again every topic ...

    Aug 3, 2007
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Moons

    I am a bit confused by this poem myself. Like Amel I enjoy the line "Cradled by the earth, lit by the sun" but other wise the meaning alludes me ...

    Jul 30, 2007


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