laurapoet

This is a story I wrote a while back. I've barely even looked at it since then, so I'm sure it needs a lot of work. Grandpa had always hated ...

Well, that was ok, but it still needs work. First of all you have a lot of repetitiveness an run-on sentences. Here are a few examples: "My parents don’t want ...

I lived this poem. I also thought it was a little repetitive, especially with all the continuous sun setting. [But once you remember that the sun doesn’t Go down and ...