lexy

Probably description. And raunchy scenes.... if u like a bit of sauce... look out for my new stuff coming your way!!!! lol

Awww blakey is good. Ole' William... Love it. But I quite like the stuff we did in GCSE cultural poems like "Halfe Caste" by... oh damn what is his name?? ...

it was compelling stuff. Can't wait to see the edited version!

How did I do??? Where are the critiques.... ?

she would pull at her hair (tearing at her hair) when someone is stressed they would... I think it works. Although the punctuation is lacking later on! :) keep it ...

but it was written in a square etc. So......... there.

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I agreed with the above but the ending seemed a little abrupt. Good stuff though x

for your critiques :) lol

I HAVE WRITERS BLOCK !

I liked this.... But then ending was unexpected. Sugar, just realised that the person above me said that too. Good work though. x p.s No hard feelings?

Its got great powerful imagery so there is my positive comment. It has emotional feeling and thats great... [/quote] Love is hidden in the darkest of places, lighting up our ...

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One of your best so far. I liked the imagery it was strong and the contrast of the sand and stars made sense to me x

i agree with Elizabeth to be honest... I don't have the time to read your delightful entry!!! Maybe some other day :D