llobalito8

yeah, I'm really not even sure why i posted this. It is rushed, and kind of pointless. haha whatever, thanks to everyone for the reviews!

Really thanks to both of you. Again I love writing, but I am fairly new to this, and i really do want all the criticism i can get. I just ...

After I posted I noticed one mistake, which is: flying in water's like smiling in frown. It should be, " flying in water is like smiling in frown." Sorry about ...

I thought it was great because of the ending. It was a complete surprise. I was expecting something a little more philosophical, but instead you gave us the picture of ...