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  • Short Story » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Three, Two, One

    Hi pastel! You were not harsh at all! I'm very sorry I made you cry! Your review was also very sad, and I can relate to the feeling of losing ...

    Aug 2, 2017
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Three, Two, One

    Thanks for the review! Yeah, I made it pretty confusing. I'll try and fix those parts! I definitely agree! One thing though, I also lost someone close to me. I ...

    Aug 2, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Humor Re: New special!

    Thanks so much! I think I have a better idea now! And by the way, I loved your poem!

    Aug 2, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: A wounded soldier

    Hey! Thanks for the review. I'll fix that typo. and about the timing of the war? Uh... I have no idea.

    Jun 30, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: A wounded soldier

    Thanks for catching that!!! wow, I think im blind.

    Jun 27, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: A wounded soldier

    Thanks so much for the review! I still think Griffinkeeper has a point, but you've got another one too. I'll see what other people have to say before I make ...

    Jun 27, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: A wounded soldier

    AH! Punctuation! Sorry!!! I wrote this at 12 so I guess I forgot!!! Thanks for the reminder! and I'll see if I can fit better words without messing it up!

    Jun 27, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: A wounded soldier

    I kinda guessed at how a soldier might feel. It would be how I would feel, so I'd be a pretty weak soldier! Thanks for the review and I'll see ...

    Jun 27, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: A wounded soldier

    Thank you so much for the feedback! I was wondering about the one with thunder in it, if I should change it or not, but I guess I should keep ...

    Jun 27, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: A wounded soldier

    Sorry about the messy formatting. I tried several times to even out the spaces, but it wouldn't allow me to when I saved. Sorry! Still, I think the rhyme has ...

    Jun 27, 2017
  • Short Story » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Emily

    Thanks for the review! Yeah, this was for an English project and I had to fill three pages with some random story about survival. I'll put my all into my ...

    May 27, 2017
  • Short Story » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Emily

    Alright, so...I got the Italics to stay. And I hope it's more enjoyable now! Thanks again!

    May 23, 2017
  • Short Story » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Emily

    When I posted this, the Italics disappeared and I couldn't get them to show up. Sorry about that. I guess I have a lot to improve. Thank you for the ...

    May 22, 2017
  • Short Story » Humor, General Re: Guadalupe The Mosquito

    Wow! That language is powerful. So, you're saying, try to make the reader really KNOW that I seriously hate her?

    May 16, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: The Broken China Doll

    I got some really useful feedback from your review! Thank you so much again!

    May 16, 2017


I like nonsense, it wakes up the brain cells. Fantasy is a necessary ingredient in living, it's a way of looking at life through the wrong end of a telescope. Which is what I do, and that enables you to laugh at life's realities.
— Dr. Seuss