lyrical_sunshine

wow, you are an amazing writer. i'm looking forward to reading more of this. and yes, the dialogue is just a bit stiff. would also be a little nice to ...

I really, really liked this. The voice of the little boy is wonderful, although, like some people said, some of the words are a little too old for him. Your ...

truthfully, i've gotten so much better at all of them. i've started keeping a notebook full of my characters personalities and such, along with story lines and plot twists. it's ...

cool. :D I feel your pain about the destroyed "baby". same happened to me.

5/10 kinda random...

ooh...interesting thought. 8/10

And #2 wins!!! YAY!!!! :D I must admit, I like this one lots :D

there is going to be a fourth one! b/c they did this "vote for a fourth book" on the website. I'd know - I'm a member :D.

out of the darkness and inot the light, we search for a chance to get into the fight. Out of the starkness of love gone awry We mumble and stumble, ...

Hmm... i think the second verse should have more to it. And maybe work on the chorus just a tad bit more. Some parts seem kind of random, such as ...

"Hmm...Well, I don't know about the rest of you, but I'm human." ~Marc "Same." ~Jake "Guilty." ~Vanessa "Yes, I am human. Contrary to popular belief." ~Dax

oooh, Malaysia. What's it like? Wait, Malaysia is.... *thinks hard*...near Japan, right? it's that chain of islands? I will feel really retarded if i'm wrong... your avatar is so much ...

the 3rd book made me want to hit James Patterson over the head with a dull ax. Yes, it was hilarious, but NOTHING MADE ANY SENSE!!!! and the things that ...

^ that works too. :D

Yay C. S. Lewis! that quote is taped to my desk lol.