madam-butterfly

Valerix ran as fast as her burning legs could take her. The soles of her feet ached as they pounded against the rocky ground. She was very tired, running for ...

well, it's very unique and sensual in lieu of just sexual which i think is great, and very alluring. you should work on the rhythm and eliminate adlibs such as ...

i really enjoyed this poem, though it's common. since you can't help writing what you feel, try to bring it out in a way that no one has ever done ...