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makar7

  • Lyric Poetry Re: Deleted

    deleted

    Oct 11, 2009
  • Other Poetry Re: The Heart

    The heart is like a puzzle, Always scattered about . A space would be good here to break up the words and make each of these thoughts a separate stanza ...

    Oct 11, 2009
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: It Ends Tonight

    OK, so this is a good base for a greater poem. The tone and emotion is good, but you're missing something... Organization. Right now, its a big mush that sounds ...

    Oct 11, 2009
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: You Never Loved Me.

    Wow! This is really good. I could sense the truth in these words, something that makes a poem great to read. I liked the metaphors and symbolism you used, especially ...

    Oct 11, 2009
  • Novel Workshop Re: Advent Child [Series]; Book One_ Lower Town

    The first word that popped into my head when I read the first chapter... DANG! I only read the first chapter and knew it was a good start for a ...

    Sep 16, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Deleted

    this has been deleted.

    Sep 12, 2009


here is the deepest secret nobody knows (here is the root of the root and the bud of the bud and the sky of the sky of a tree called life; which grows higher than the soul can home or mind can hide) and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart i carry your heart (i carry it in my heart)
— e.e. cummings