matthewmazer

Really neat. I agree with what Sissy said, you should make it into a poem,if you can't thoug I don't blame you, I suck at poetry.

PURELY FANTASTIC!

Not a bad beginning chapter. When you added the part of the boy's father being a templar and dyinh in the crusade that I added a really neat piece of ...

I've got Adrian and Corey in there because when I get into the present of the book they save him(long story) When Damian talks to Mathias about giving up control ...

Done with the first edit! What do you think?

1)In my earlier stuff, back before I joined YWS I wrote about halflings. I originaly had them as something like human and some forgotten race, but I changed it to ...

If you have ever visited my profile you'll know that I was originally writing something very similiar to this called the Cataclsym Chronicles. I was cleaning through my desk one ...

*Fogot to post this with the other comment* If you're reading this I'm asking if you could look at the CC and tell me which is better. This is also ...

If you have ever visited my profile you'll know that I was originally writing something very similiar to this called the Cataclsym Chronicles. I was cleaning through my desk one ...

As a fellow fan of Halo I read this and I thought it was really neat, especially the way you writ everything from the game itself. Something I can probably ...

I was reading this and thought it was really "capturing." My only problem is the same as others and that is that you need a longer prologue.

Hoping everyone will read this as they stop by but if youve looked at my profile recently youll see that i found an old story that i used to write ...

Vari: I'm going to have this series be an installment in the entire series. The end of this will be picked up with another series, spaced a few years later. ...

Hoping everyone will read this as they stop by but if youve looked at my profile recently youll see that i found an old story that i used to write ...

Hoping everyone will read this as they stop by but if youve looked at my profile recently youll see that i found an old story that i used to write ...