mephet

Hi! I'll make sure to look for unnecessary word repetition and too many simple sentences (I try to use short sentences for effect/characterization, but it won't work if I do ...

Thank you very much for reading and for the suggestions and encouragement! : )

Thank you for reading and leaving a comment! : )

Thank you for reading and leaving a review! : ) The beginning could maybe use some clarifying, that's true. Thanks for the encouragement!

Wow, thank you! I'm really glad you if liked the setting and characterization! But you're right - the beginning could use a little bit of description to set the scene. ...

Hi! Thank you for taking the time to read and review, and for the encouragement! : ) And thank you for correcting those grammar errors, I'll fix them in the ...