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Hi MysticalBlood I like this a lot but I don't recognise the book that the ideas are from. It does jump tenses but that makes it good as she is ...

Hi butterflyflutterby2 I like this but it reminds me a lot of Harry Potter. When you wright you need to make sure that you have punctuation otherwise it is really ...

Hi whatevr88 Thanks for the pm. I like this chapter, you have the start of a really good story and this chapter isn't to bad. I can't see anything wrong ...

Hi brassnbridle I like this, it is a fanfiction of one of my all time favourite books. I had never really thought of what Hermione did after Harry went through ...

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Hi Apple I like this story and I think you have a real talent for writing. I would advise re-reading your work, it helps to see if there are any ...

Hi *writewatiwant* I really like this post and thanks for the pm. Nit-picking time he picked the taser and soon she was out of consciousness. this would sound better as ...

Hi bubblegum I like this part of the story a lot. I saw a few mistakes but they were minor ones so I would advise a re-read of your work ...

Hi Quetseli I really like this story and I think it is a really good beginning. I think you should re-read it though as I saw a few small mistakes, ...

Hi whatevr88 I like this. The guy thing is unexpected and it keeps the reader interested. I hope you carry on with it as it could be a real good ...

Hi Ella Thompson I like this and I think its a good beginning, carry on writing it and see what happens. Isn't there supposed to be a capital letter at ...

Hi TheNewHero I like the other books in the series but as yet I haven't read Max or Fang, but when my mum has finished Fang I am so next ...

Hi KanenRenoir I like this post. I think its really good, I especially like the way that there will be two narrators of the story, it can sometimes make the ...

Hi *writewatiwant* Thanks for the pm. I like the way the mc is a strong character and she won't give in easily. I didn't see any mistakes but some bits ...

Hi ANate145 I like this. I like the way that the mc is Artemis's cousin and is probably just as smart as the young thief. Can't see anything wrong with ...