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  • Short Story » General, General Re: How to Kill a Baby

    I'm pretty new to the forums here, but this is by far the best thing I have read. Wow. The premise is great. The dialog as well. I wish I ...

    Sep 12, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: A Thousand Dancing Kites

    I think that that story really has the potential to make people "wow" at the end, but in the current form, it just didn't do that for me. I definitely ...

    Aug 16, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Society of the Closet

    That was really creative. I really liked the conversations of the hangers. The characterizations were all done very well. I thought the end could be improved though. For 90% of ...

    Aug 8, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: A Pillar of Salt

    Overall, short, but good for how long it was. I think it could work really good as something inside a larger piece where we know the narrator better. There were ...

    Aug 7, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: the dentist

    My eyes didn't leave the screen once reading that story. The first sentence which may have been a bit cliche, but who cares? The "assaulted possum" bit is great. I ...

    Aug 3, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Laughing on the Outside

    I found one small error The next week I showed up with nothing on me but my fake ID and a small hammer in my pocket" Wow. Amazing work. I ...

    Aug 2, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Future Soldier

    That was really good. Overall, I liked it. I agree with the previous comment that there might be a few ideas to expand upon such as what Crusher looks like ...

    Aug 2, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: ...

    I really liked that. Normally, this isn't the kind of story I would enjoy at all, but it was great. I really love the voice of the whole thing. The ...

    Aug 2, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: A depression : Trying to escape

    I think that this really should be a longer piece. I mean sure, flash fiction can be great, but if the reader were more connected to the character, then the ...

    Aug 2, 2007


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