mitte

I like this poem, it's good. The repetition of "mister moon" in the first stanza is a nice touch. It's kinda like what a kid would write...But i guess that's ...

I've been reading some of your poems, and I have to say that you're kinda hit'n miss... This though, is on the ball! I think it's great. The pace of ...

I thought this was pretty bad. The rhythm of the lines were all over the place, and drew away from the meaning of the poem. Another problem I found, was ...