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  • Short Story » General, General Re: A Hand to Hold - a 7/7 Memorial (Rewritten)

    Hey Ahmad! I love this story and how you've described every single detail. You start by introducing Gerry, a busy woman who uses the train for the first time. The ...

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Keep smiling. . .

    Hey, Kattie! I like poems with positive outlook and a good message of hope. The only nitpick for me is that I find it to be to plain and drab. ...

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Anticipation

    Hey, sarebear! This was really fun to read and the descriptions of anticipation just leaped from my computer screen. Great work and keep those creative juices flowing! Murtuza :)

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Life Goes On

    Hey Deanie, This poem sounds a lot like one that I've written and I really love the way that you've managed to bind all those emotions of feeling lost and ...

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Fighting Temptation

    Deanie :D I can so empathize with you on this! For me, chocolate is just sweet love and warmness and I feel happy after having a good wrapper or maybe ...

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Lost Love

    Deanie! This is such a great poem! I'm so impressed with the use of the words and situation that you are trying to portray. The story you're telling here is ...

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Gabrielle

    Scarlett! As promised, I am here to review! This poem is short indeed but really delves into Gabrielle's despair. However, it becomes a bit too repetitive when you keep say ...

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: La Flor de Oro

    Hey, Mello! I love this poem a lot. I don't understand a single word of Spanish but I'm glad you translated the poem into English as well because this is ...

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Colors and Words

    Hey there, form! This poem is really good and really delves into the subject really well. To live an existence worthy of a human being and living among God's wonderful ...

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Autumn

    Hey, uncharted! This poem has some great metaphorical usage and it all comes along seamlessly. The transitions from being such a beautiful day from the "orange covered paths" to the ...

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Bathe

    Hey there, Charity! I like the extreme dramatization and the imagery you've managed to capture. Your creative mind has great ways of expressing itself since it makes such great descriptions ...

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A Gray Delivery

    Hi Audy! Wow, who knew that eating a pizza could get so intense? You've managed to get into the heart of the darkness that today's social forums portray and encourage. ...

    Nov 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Masked

    Hey there, Unmarked! I like this poem a lot for the great use of imagery and the entire conception about this. I'm not one for giving much critique, but as ...

    Nov 26, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Would You Like a Cookie?

    Hey, Carefree! Firstly, welcome to YWS! I'm glad you joined this community! And congratulations on your first post. A really great one at that too! This poem is so sweet ...

    Nov 26, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: Fill-out form for access to Heaven.

    Mikko! this is hilarious fun! I'm so lol-ed up right now. xD But seriously, if I had a ticket to heaven, then I'd definitely give it to you! God bless, ...

    Nov 26, 2011


Forgiveness is the fragrance that the violet sheds on the heel that has crushed it.
— Mark Twain