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many thx for the comments...the only problem is...i havent decided what happens, so i cant write more... nikki

I really, really liked this... It did look like medevial times...I'm not much of an expert on art, (I really stink at it) but it looked great:)

Brian, I don't really see quite what you are asking me or telling me. Nicole

Once again, thx for the comments! I really thought that even though the topic has been used, I wrote a different type of poem on it.

Many thx for the comments...I tried to rewrite, lmk what you think... Greed is a goblin That takes over us, Leading us away from honesty And hard work And into ...

good topic in my opinion, but try not to take on such a "preaching" tone (someone else said that too) and maybe make it a little bit shorter. It was ...

Okay...Recently in my school, there was a fight (as usual) and no adults were around (also as usual) It was basicaly just an older and stronger kid picking on the ...

I really just get an idea and start writing...Afterwartds, I reread and usually find mistakes, things that could be more descriptive, etc...

Usher- Yeah!

I also read this book and I really, really liked it. As a word of advice, her other books were also really good, so do read them:) It was a ...

Heres my try "This is going to be a long tiring story of the lives of some very boring and tiring people, so you might as well stop reading it ...

I think that you captured the pressure of the moment very well, but like Brian I sort of lost you at some points....I think that the italics were speech for ...

Very good! I didn't think that I was going to like it because I usually don't like Sci-Fi stories, but it was really good. I really like the first chapter. ...

You really did a good job on this... I liked it because it was so realistic... Also...I know from experience how on AIM things like this happen. In my experience, ...

Loved the twist ending and the story in general...Just one thing besides spelling mistakes already pointed out... [quote="A.O. Avalon"]I nod, just as I did then. His next comment rings chillingly ...