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This was an educational and rather interesting piece to read. It was like reading a rather interesting section out of a textbook. In the case of this being a magazine ...

This was a nice, cheerful poem. It tells a story rather well and has a nice even flow most of the time. The character that was presented was missing a ...

Hey Amber. I like the thoughts behind this poem, especially how it brings in to question how things can change someone. Though, what I don't really like is the short ...

Hey there. This story was a nice short story. It was well concluded and kept focus on the topic at hand. Though, your spelling needs a little work and ellipses ...

Free verse poetry is one of the hardest types of poetry to write well. The lack of form usually leads many writers into having a piece that is more like ...

Unfortunately, this is the first piece of yours that I have read. Now because I'm an evil pain in the (censored), I'll start with what I don't like about it. ...

I've been hearing about this story for ages now. I have been wanting to read it, but had never gotten around to it. So when I do finally start reading ...

I agree with AngelKnight. This poem is rather mild and half-hearted when based on a topic such as Katrina. I would recommend more emotional output. You have represented a scene ...

This poem uses great imagery and has a strong emotional story. What I don't like, though, is the usage of rhyme (intentional all want) on only a couple of lines ...

You have written a nice little piece here. I like your portrayal of the afterlife, as well as your touch into religion. What I don't like is the fact that ...

A rather beautiful poem, though the rhyme scheme is a bit off hand. Punctuation wasn't at it's best and it is slightly unstructured compared to other works that I have ...

I enjoyed reading this poem. I like how you question what defines who you are. You rhyme scheme is good, as well as your flow. The story is also nice ...

I enjoyed this poem. There is lots of emotion in it and a good story too. I like the abcb rhyme scheme in the first two stanzas but then you ...

I see the idea of corrupting something innocent. You kept the flow good and was pretty consistent with the rhyme scheme. The new lines in the first stanza are a ...

I am very intrigued by your prologue. I am interested as to who these people are, how the girl died and the circumstances of which caused her death. My only ...