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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: ashura: A World of Sword and Magic Chapter 5

    Hello again! I don't think this chapter was as compelling as the previous one I reviewed and I'll try to explain why in my review. I also noticed I got ...

    Jan 29, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Dramatic Re: The King of Winter - Chapter Four of Shattered Crowns

    Hello! I have to admit I have only read half of this if that. This is way too long, no reader is going to sit here and read a chapter ...

    Jan 29, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Ashura: A World of Sword and Magic Chapter 4

    Hello! So I haven't read anything else but the prologue so I understand a little bit but not that much. This review will be mostly about the writing style and ...

    Jan 29, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Fur Feathers Scales and Stars - 2.3

    Hello! So I haven't read any of your other works, though I did enjoy reading this. This review will be purely on characterisation in this chapter and your writing style. ...

    Jan 29, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Fantasy Re: The 12 Dynasties of Xidon, chapter 1

    Hi Ninlil! I know this is quite old but I wanted to thank you for reviewing Journey of Acceptance (I know that was a while a go but I haven't ...

    Jan 29, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: Kambili-chapter one (edited version)

    Hello! Occymay here for a review. I have to admit I found this rather confusing at times. I think you need to work mostly on dialogue, I'm guessing you haven't ...

    Jan 29, 2017
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Teen Fiction Re: She Is

    Hi Bubbles, I know this is an old piece but I wanted to thank you for reviewing of Knowing Gods. I just wanted to say how beautiful and sad and ...

    Jan 29, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Fanfiction Re: Stop the Rewind: Chapter 1

    Hi Mage! This was a good chapter and I really loved the Bartimaeus Trilogy elements, it makes me want to go re read them :D Positives- I liked the character ...

    Jan 29, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Romantic Re: Our Fate Written In The Lines - Chapter 1

    Hi marmalade! Well, I will defiantly need to carrying on reading this :) I thought the writing was good and as an army it is calling to me :D Positives- ...

    Jan 29, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Fantasy Re: The Case of Schadel H. Kueper - Chapter 2 - Part I

    Hello Mage! Here for my third review :) Once again, great stuff and I'm glad I choose your work for my final review of the day, short but sweet :D ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: Cold Flames (Chapter 1)

    Hello! So this piece was interesting and quite mysterious in its own way but I'm slightly confused at what was going on. Positives- I quite like the way you write ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Realistic Re: The Colour of a Street Light

    Hello! This piece is incredibly interesting and I'm intrigued to find out more about this. Positives- You were able to create a lot of mystery in your piece which is ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Script » Mystery / Suspense, Fantasy Re: Pree-Scene: The dark woods

    Hello! As an actor, I really enjoyed reading this because I love scripts and I also love fantasy. Positives- I felt that you were really good at creating tension and ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: The Last Human: Prologue

    Hello! Okay, this piece seems very interesting and I want to find out more about it. I saw in a previous post that the human inside the pod is the ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Historical Fiction Re: Emilie Butter: Cursed Water: Chapter 1

    Hello Marmalade! Here for another review :) Thank goodness, you did a great job with your English terminology and I can tell you clearly either know England well or you ...

    Nov 27, 2016


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— Uncle Iroh, Avatar the Last Airbender