ocyober

thanks for posting, and i came up with it in 2min so i didn't expect it to be good but thanks for the critisism.

i loved the graphic nature it holds and how it describes lust...the only thing would be to again shorten the sentences...give the same expression in fewer words is what a ...

i love the dynamics of this poem and i think you present it very well. There is much emotion behind this poem. Man i sound like my teacher who picks ...