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Just a few nit picks: "What where you doing out in that rain?" I assume you meant "were" instead of "where" "I don't know I was trying to get a ...

This is really good! I really want to know what happens next! My only complaint is that you kinda jumped right into the whole "Heyyy this girl is on the ...

Right now I want to die. I believe I've said these words before. My hands are shaking and my palms are sweaty. My fury quickly turning to grief. Tears streak ...

I had to observe someone and write about it for Creative Writing class a few years ago. It's short but I kinda like it. Let me know how you feel ...

These are OK lyrics. There seems to be a lot going on in the song though. Generally it's easy to distinguish the chorus but this time I just seemed as ...

I agree with the comments that Seleneforeverdream said, most of the problems with this is that, like you said it is a bit unclear, but can be cleaned up nicely ...

This is an amazing poem! Really paints a fabulous picture in the mind of the seasons and all that they bring with them. However, you do have a few grammatical ...

This is an amazing poem! Really paints a fabulous picture in the mind of the seasons and all that they bring with them. However, you do have a few gramatical ...

I wrote this awhile ago, and now I feel like it's completely embarrassing and cheesey; perhaps worthy of a "Chicken Soup for the soul" book but I thought I'd post ...

I wrote this in Creative Writing about 2 years ago. I might turn it into a novel. Please leave feedback on how you like it! An eerie smoke hung fresh ...