peace.love.and.music.013

Just a few nit picks: "What where you doing out in that rain?" I assume you meant "were" instead of "where" "I don't know I was trying to get a ...

This is really good! I really want to know what happens next! My only complaint is that you kinda jumped right into the whole "Heyyy this girl is on the ...

These are OK lyrics. There seems to be a lot going on in the song though. Generally it's easy to distinguish the chorus but this time I just seemed as ...

I agree with the comments that Seleneforeverdream said, most of the problems with this is that, like you said it is a bit unclear, but can be cleaned up nicely ...

This is an amazing poem! Really paints a fabulous picture in the mind of the seasons and all that they bring with them. However, you do have a few gramatical ...