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Hi Mattress! :P I don't have much time to give you a review so I'm just going be make it short and sweet and to the point :). I like ...

Since Jabber caught the grammar stuff all I can really say is to go back and look through it, you'll see the mistakes. It looks really cool and I can ...

Hi Eli, I'm here with the review like you asked :). I thought this was an interesting idea but it confused me a little in the beginning. When you started ...

Hi Hope. Here's your review: I thought personally this was a bit rushed. I'd like to know more of what Cara was thinking as she was walking home. I liked ...

Okay Kat I agree with Flyers :( You need to expand on this idea because we don't know what is happening around her or anything. It's just a small bit ...

Hi JD, peanut here :). She looked in the mirror, expecting to see a chestnut brown hair girl, her wavy hair cascading down to her hips, the envy of all ...

Hi JD. Like I told you this did make me cry (I'm a sap what can I say). I examine her face. Her pale blue eyes that once used to ...

Kate, I've read all of the chapters for this story and I think you should expand on it. Make a few more chapters. I want to see how Emma's father ...

Aqua I thought these letters were good. But they would have been better if you had spread them out a little more. There were a few spelling mistakes that I ...

Hi Ed. I know I told you about rewording some parts maybe to make it flow better or to make better I'm not sure how to help you there. But ...

Hi Forest. I'm not a poetry expert but I'm going to review this anyway. I noticed that there is no punctuation, this bothered me because of the capital letters. Well ...

Okay hi Logan, I'm Sarah. Welcome to YWS! :) I only scanned this passage but I noticed in the first few paragraphs that you wrote that I did this and ...

Hi Star. I agree with Random and Kurt. I personally though it was hard to read, since I'm one of those people who get distracted by grammar errors. I know ...

Hi Squarened. I'm Peanut and I think you did creepy just fine. I liked your characters but towards the beginning Afton seemed very childish and annoying. Which I assume he ...

Hi Air. There was a lot of information that you told the reader in this page. You could tell less information to sort of spread out through more than one ...