piepiemann22

It's a nice piece. As for a title idea, not sure. Try to encorporate the fact eveyone has streanth and wants. Try it.

Nice. Are you going to turn this into a book? If so then it has great promise.

A light embraces me, forever coiled in the flow. I am now a servant of light, with a destiny unknown. I shall fight till the end, for you and what ...

Ding, ding, ding. "Got to make it before the final bell." A young boy ruining down the street just barely makes it into the school courtyard before the final bell. ...

I love it. It speaks from the heart so well. Don't worry what other people say, your poetry is exelent!

I think it's a simple poem, but it was nice to write during the holidays.

I enjoied it. You wrote it well. you seemed to put a lot of thought into this piece. It was also nice the way you made it ryme. thats hard ...

Thank you

A box is all that surrounds me, a cage is my home. I watch the birds fly, as free as can be. I long for hope, so I may sore, ...

I like it. It seems to talk about something important if not for you, others. But ther are a few parts i didn't understand. "It screams in pan to me," ...

It has no point. It looks like you just threw it together. Next time put FEELINGS in your poems.

I see no meaning at all. Though they rarly do, but still, i see no point to it at all. Sorry

Pretty good for your first piece. I like the fact you made it ryme. The only problem is it doesn't have a meaning. No point, not even a sense of ...

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Amen brother, can't wait till this happens to me. From Ian, don't ask me?