pinkblossom

This seems like something a fourth grader would write. The idea of a girl meeting cute guy and blah blah blah is way over-done. Write it as if you were ...

What in the world is this? You seriously need to learn how to properly format your writing. Your grammar is horrible and this is just a big slop of text ...

Hello, I am going to critique on your writing. First of all, I noticed that you do not use proper paragraph formatting. Remember, with each new speaker or new scene, ...