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Re: Not So Quiet After All
hellooo XD This is a really good piece!! I love how it's short and straight to the point!! my criticism: You may think I'm shy in class, Quietly waiting for ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Only You
heey this is a reall sweet poem and I love it. your friend captured that feeling very well. Now we are severed. Cut into two but there is still one ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Her Eyes Of Gray
beautiful poem!! It's great! I love the rhyme in it and I especially like this part: Her sparkling eyes of blue, Have dulled to a simple gray, The life that ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Untitled
nice poem!!! you should consider to take out the comma's in the last sentence: I’m alone in this;You can’t see me, All you see is a “good, innocent, naïve, girl” ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: I'll Be There
I like this poem! you should consider to maybe change -cryin'- into something that rhymes better When things tumble down around, Just keep your eyes on mine. I'll hold you ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Where Are You?
I like this write! but you should consider to rewrite: I opened my eyes this morning And most everything was just the same Except you weren’t there to hold my ...
Mar 12, 2011 -
Re: Dear Diary.
love this! maybe you should leave out 'just' in the last sentence, because I think it would sound better.. So just in case he won't be listening I'll just take ...
Mar 12, 2011