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Cloud took Keke’s hand, holding her close as if he could lose her at any moment. Their happiness depended on each other, Cloud would do anything for her, and vice ...

Hey suchis, great job, can't wait to see where this is going. Are you going to continue this? Not much to say here, but try reading it out loud, this ...

Heya.This is really great, a really original and creative idea. You've got a great way of introducing your reader to the story, letting them know exactly what their situation is ...

This is good, but i think you should describe you characters a bit more, describe their situations, describe their feelings. Another thing is.. I was so confused when i was ...

Okay colours, you need to bulk up your sentences a bit and fix your spelling, also, try to make your sentences flow a bit better because right now it's really ...

“If it was nothing, you wouldn’t be scared; you’re not scared of anything! You’re the bravest! This means we should all be scared…” He said in his adorable voice that ...

My ears began to twitch at a strange set of footsteps, ones I thought I’d never hear again, “Everyone down!” I hissed. “Ali-!” Sam started before I clamped his mouth ...

“Here! Jared!” I called as we ran across the roof, laughing, being the way kid’s should, having fun, free of fear, free of adults, and free from our old lives. ...

Hey WD, can you review this for me? I just fixed it up and hope it's a bit better. thx WD

Preface This was our sanctuary, an abandoned centre, the only place we could hide from those who sought us out, and who hunted us… We spent most of the Summer ...