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Hi! I'm going to get straight into things :D Your first stanza is amazing. The rhyme did not feel forced, it flowed really way, and was an amazing hook to ...

HELLO! I must say that i now intend to read this book, but i have a question. Is the novel self contained and how it ends that could be enough, ...

Hi! I have one suggestion! I think everyone would read the red first, I know i did. And it summed everything up. I didn't feel that it justifyed the rest ...

Hi :) I like the content of the poem, I like what you're saying, well no like, but you know what I mean. Unfortuently, I don't like the form of ...

WOO! This is a superb poem! i love what you were going for here, and it is quite cynical in a way, which speaks directly to me :D However, the ...

Hey! I really liked this....which is suprising as it's not usually the type of writing i like. I'd perhaps appreciate a little more form in the poem, i.e. a steady ...

Hi. I liked the theme behind this, i truly did, but i do think it need work. As this is personal experience, i think the emotion behind the piece could ...

Hi! I liked this a lot! For various reasons. Two being that this is my mind set to a tee and lily is my alter ego if you would :D ...

Hey :D I quite liked it and it sounds like it could be a really good song :) However; In the chorus where it says "spell" It makes it seem ...

All the classic signs of nerdism! :D I wish i had some of these traits, but none-the-less I am a nerd :P i quite like this form, structure ect. The ...

HEY! First thing i must say is Bravo, a hundred times over! That was beautifully written! A very good read. However, just saying that would be pointless. Numbers, planets, hand-drawn ...

Hey, First off, I don't get, so please tell me :L Next I think length needs adding as i felt like i was just reading an oppening. Next emotion; there ...

Hello, that was, well, awesome! Negatives first, there aren't many. I'd condense it into fewer paragraphs as the transition lost raw emotion, but i would isolate "I heard it befor ...

Hello :) The two poems are each others flaw if that makes sense. I would say to you what your teacher said to you for the first one, yes. But ...

Hey, your poem intrigues me so i am giving you a large review :D Like a shadow he enters my realm, Change to semi colon my solitude Period Darkening my ...