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We dance and swing We do a twist Our feet move quickly The ground, they kiss We waltz and twirl A loop-dy-loop Around the bend In for a scoop The ...

When we first met each other, we were naive and very young. The two of us were different, but we always had fun.

Not a poem...but a song :) Just a fun song I wrote up one day while I was bored...critique at will! --------------------------------------- I look so cute sitting in this tree ...

Wow...I love this! This is great, I don't think I'd change or critique a single thing. Wonderful :) I'd like to see more from you!! Keep writing

Chapter Four I snap another picture, grinning as I capture the bird just in time before it flies away from its nest in the cherry tree. I turn the small ...

Just a few things :) I loved this, I really felt the emotion that you were portraying in it. Wonderful. It's raining again. I love the opening line! Why do ...

When I first saw the title I thought "Oooh serious title..." and then I clicked on it to see the single sentence. I have to say, it made me smile. ...

Thanks yeah :) I'll keep it in mind for the rest of the chapters that I proof before posting

Chapter Three I must be the queen of awkward. I remember when I was little and my mother told me that I was the most awkward OCD klutz she’d ever ...

Wow...this is a very very pretty piece of poetry. You have a knack for painting a picture. :) The only think I would possibly change and it really doesn't have ...

Aw thanks Snickers! I'm really glad you liked it so much!! :)

Thanks Kafka and Harshita for reading! I'm glad both of you liked it :)

Thank you Kafka! When I wrote this, I knew it needed to be "I", but the only problem is that throughout the poem it's written with ten syllables on every ...

Please, critique the poem to your hearts desire! It started with a simple touch of hands, Perhaps a twitch of a nose, not even. Beat of a heart rushes; knees ...

Hahahaha :D I love love love this. Simply shortly sweetly funny. Keep writing, this was so adorable to read.