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Re: Of their own accord
This is really spectacular! I love your elloquent uses of words and phrases and your unusual yet flowingly rhythmic pace is almost soothing, no matter what the tone was and/ ...
Oct 2, 2014 -
Re: Romance
Beauty is only skin deep. :) I totally agree. The only nitpick I have is optional. In the following phrase: "If you were anything else in this universe" Maybe "this" ...
Sep 30, 2014 -
Re: f
I love this poem :) I found a few nitpicks. "and T.V and games." "TV" doesn't need the period in between the T and the V. Also, "Watch amateur primate," ...
Sep 29, 2014 -
Re: The first betrayal
Magnificent! I found my first nitpick a bit early into the poem: "Back into past and frozen mess" Maybe it should be "messes" instead of "mess"? Well, IDKK! I think ...
Sep 26, 2014 -
Re: Network of Keys Chapter 9 part 3; Ky, A Jump
Really, reallyyy good! I love how Ky sort of has the catch phrase of "Oh Keys." It's wonderful. One mistake that caught my eye: (and keep in mind that I ...
Sep 21, 2014 -
Re: Stupid Heart [Part 2]
A spectacular speech. Your placement of the italics is absolute perfection! One small nitpick: The phrase "While we can." I thought long and hard and decided that it may have ...
Sep 21, 2014 -
Re: A Word of Advice
I love this. The way you use your words with such grace and rhythmic flow...it's incredible. And the truth of it all - whether its teenagers or children or even ...
Sep 20, 2014