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That was outstanding. I love the jab at human nature. It's so true, it's funny. As far as construction/spelling/grammar , it was perfect all except for... #1 Who is they? ...

Hey, good job. I liked it and I don't even agree with your message. I could rant and rave about what a scumbag Saddam Hussein is and how much better ...

Awww... :thud: the wolf dies. It was an interesting piece and I was engaged, but you started a lot- read: too many- sentences with the pronoun "I". Just as a ...

Not bad, not bad at all. I kept expecting that the girl's mother would be a 3-eyed vampire-zombie-mutant-werewolf-freak and that was why all the girls were frightened. When I found ...

Hah! That was great. Don't think that by putting "hah" I thought it was cute and lame. For being only 13, you sure wrote a pretty creepy story. It didn't ...

That was really unique. I've tried to write stories from dreams before, but they always turn out muddled and incomprehensible. You managed to make your dream into a fairly understandable ...

Hey, this is looking good. It read smoothly and I found it pretty interesting. Cambia Kitty15 covered most of the grammar/composition errors, so I'll leave you alone as far as ...

Well I read the whole thing, unlike someone, as I am not imposed by large walls of text. On this website, the font on the pages is really small so ...

Hey, good job. This was written very well and it flowed fairly evenly. Just one complaint: Your dialog needs more paragraphs. The man lets out a guttural laugh in hearing ...

Yeah, this is intriguing; I'm already interested. Just one thing, it doesn't really read like a newspaper story. Newspaper articles generally tend to be a little more detailed with a ...

It was interesting. You definitely capture something about the simplicity and joy of youth. At the same time, you invoke suicidal thoughts of mourning. I don't know if this poetry, ...

Not bad, not bad. It's a little intriguing already; I mean with the lake thing. Just one complaint. It's a common mistake for writers to "tell" instead of "show". Of ...

Hey, this was great. It really creeped me out. All in all, I'd say it makes an excellent prologue. Just one thing: it was a little confusing at first. you ...

Hey, what's up? Did you read the rules for this forum? You're not supposed to post songs that have already been written. These lyrics are from MC Chris' first CD: ...