seeminglymeaningless

hey! another good piece for a 14 yr old! but here's the stuff I picked up: Danny was quite surprised to see the head --- here explain what kind of ...

first of all, nice story. second: A metal slug whizzed through the air, burying itself in the concrete. Fire illuminated the scene: gunfire, pounding through the door like it was ...

Good story. though awkwardly written. first off, because it starts off as a memoir, the reader know that the story teller isn't dead. Therefore, we know he's overcome all the ...

hey... i, for one, read all of your story. it was surprisingly good. it has a plot, good diolouge and the right amount of characters. i didn't like Part Two ...

bonus points? *laughs* has it got something to do with gossip that you're sick and tired of? Neways - this is really well written and i couldn't find one mistake ...

Precariously, she held the heavy wooden spear in her hands as she ducked under a large hibiscus plant. ---- i think percariously should be somewhere in the middle of the ...

hey good story so far - but in the second part, there's this: Too fast for Kana, he grabbed her own gun and shot her in the head. --- i ...

this was hilarious!!!!! geez! my moustache was getting more action that I was, and I continued to become less and less sober, the more I started becoming jealous of my ...

hey wow! that was awesome! maybe u didn't intend it to be creepy, but man!!! gave me goosebumps everywhere! if this website was like i'd so totally favourite that!!!! nice ...

again, a nice peice of work! all that needs to be fixed are simple errors, along with your use of speech marks. for example: ‘He travels a lot’. ----------- this ...

This story is okay, but it rambles on a bit. Punctuation, diolouge, literation - the whole lot is great - it just isn't the best story to read. I cannot ...

Nice - wasn't expecting that kind of story at all - a neat little surprise. Good idea, nice pace. . . but the ending was a little weak. The last ...

this was great!!!! When u said it was going to be in the style of HHGTTG, i was "oh oh" - but it turned into "oh! oh!" wow! made me ...

I liked this one! and Rodax was so cool! - wasn't expecting that! i really enjoyed the beginning - reminded me of Andy McNab, Matthew Reily and the guy that ...

“You have a personal life?” Rodax started, unable to help himself. *LAUGHS* “Mercenary! That‘s quite enough. You‘re upsetting me.” Baalith shouted. --- SOUNDS SILLY. I MEAN, WHEN I SHOUT T