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shiney1

  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Turn It Around

    Wow. This is good. I'll admit, it didn't grad me at first (Maybe use a better opener?) But as I kept reading I enjoyed it. Imagery 7/10 (it's hard to ...

    Jul 31, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I Can See

    Despite the views of others, I liked this poem. It flowed well, and though it was rather repetitive, that was this poem's style, and I can understand that. I wish ...

    Jul 31, 2011
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: A walk with Jesus

    Wow.... That was simply AMAZING! The imagery was phenomenal, and the whole story flowed pretty well. I love the message, and I would love to be in the narrator's shoes. ...

    Jul 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Freaks

    Wonderful poem! Real Christians are freaks of society, as they go against what is "normal." In the words of tobymac's Jesus Freak song: What will people do when they hear ...

    Jul 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Goodbye Stranger

    This is a nice poem. It was interesting in a depressing manner, and it had a good amount of feeling in it. I feel that there could have been a ...

    Jul 11, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Coward

    Hey, shiney1 here! I like this poem. It is simple, to the point and very interesting. One if the big problem I have though, is that I feel this hardly ...

    Jul 9, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I'm Sorry

    This was very nice. I haven't seen anything like it on YWS, so it was refreshing from all of the sob romance stories between lovers and such. The "sorry's" were ...

    Jul 9, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Home

    Hi, shiney1 here :) I like the way the poem flowed, and it had a good bit of imagery in it. The ending was nice and smooth, and closed the ...

    Jul 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Untitled

    Well, I liked this poem a lot. I haven't seen one like it, even though the subject used a fair amount of time, and that's a good thing. It flowed ...

    Jun 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: nothing

    Writer's Block!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! XD That's the first thing I thought of when I read this. I have never seen a poem like this before! A+ for originality. Some critics would say ...

    Jun 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Brilliant

    Hey, shiney1 here :) I like the feeling the poem has, and the subject. It didn't have as much imagery as I would have liked, but it had a fair ...

    Jun 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Booty Shorts

    XD XD XD XD I just love that picture, for one! I also love the topic and how you conveyed your message. I agree totally with what you said about ...

    Jun 14, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: What Do You Admire?

    Hi, shiney1 here! The title sounded interesting, so I took a look. The first line was a bit intriguing as well, but as I read the next line, and the ...

    Jun 11, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: DISCIPLE

    Hey, shiney1 here! You are the ONLY person I have seen on this site that does acrostics like me, in other words, does not murder the word and makes the ...

    Jun 10, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Keys

    Hey, shiney1 here! Okay. This poem was...different. I like the topic, but it is not that easy to understand. It is choppy in many places, hardly flows, and it leaves ...

    Jun 2, 2011


I want to do with you what spring does with the cherry trees.
— Pablo Neruda