silvermoon17

I really like the imagery, but I’ll (of course) change my review, since I’m not an English teacher. Anyways, yes; I really like the imagery- but I also like how ...

I think this poem has a loooooot of potential, and although metaphors/similes/imagery/.. is almost completely absent, we get the message. I mean, yeah; sure we get it- but maybe more ...

Hello hello dear friend. I really like your poem(s) but there are a few things I’d like to point out, first of all, the opening line. You must start with ...

Short sentences represent well the thoughts of a babe, the simplicity and effectiveness in this simplicity- is, well; effective. We get the message, clear as day; when he asks if ...

I like the way you rhyme stuff in the sentence itself, and the fact it’s short. Too long- too forgettable. I like the telescope reference, (personally, that reminded me about ...

I think this poem has a lot of potential, and by that, I mean you explore an interesting aspect of revolution. But you missed another. In here, you talk about ...

Oof I love this! I like the way you presented poems at the beginning. Even though I thought the beginning opening was quite slowly, Broken Thrust; on the other hand, ...

My own advice of improving your poem, is by adding rhymes; but also stop doing something like -and so he went, happily out there for- -nothing is sweeter than a ...

I love the design of the poem- something unique and refreshing at the time. I like, also; certain sentences as « there was no sunshine/ Since your last smile. » I like ...

I won’t be talking about imagery or metaphors or anything like that, I’m not an English teacher teaching you how to write; I’m a reviewer! So the only problem(s) in ...

What can I say.. I’m an escapist, and I promise that reading this really projected me in the dimension that you built. I love how you mix mystery, love and ...

Oof I loved it! And for those who said that the beginning wasn’t seen clearly enough as a dream.. and that it felt blurry or whatever.. well.. isn’t that what ...

I’m not sure why 13 is seen as a bad omen. I mean, sure; it’s a bad number if you’re a Christian/Jew/.. (sorry if I missed any.. you guys are ...

This is what I call a short story! And a beautiful one at that 🤩 I’m impressed of how little you wrote for such story. Some say it’s too short.. ...