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I have to say this is very good. I disagree with Heart's idea that it should have a rhyme scheme. This seems like its meant to be a narrative poem. ...

One major problem with this is that it doesn't have a consistent rhyme scheme. Maybe that's purposeful but it gets kind of annoying. At least to me. Labeling choruses, verses, ...

I like the basic message of the poem which is don't change who you are to become more famous and stuff like that. I would advise trying to use more ...

The premise to this story is very dry. So a girl randomly drowns (no explanation is given. why didn't the girl cry for help?) and lost with her life is ...

Such is life of all teenagers. The tone clearly shows the narrators ambivalence on her(?) true identity, something that every kid experiences. I'd like more imagery. When I write poetry ...

I like it. Perhaps because its similar to how I'm feeling? Not sure if that's a good thing D:. The repetition gets annoying sometimes but it's not unbearable. I feel ...