smorgishborg

Thanks for fixing. If I had one problem with the play, I'd say events developed a little too fast. There was no exposition, and the climax of this scene came ...

I had less a problem with the last two lines, instead, the last three lines of the first stanza trpped me up. I felt like those lines belonged at the ...

In complete agreement with previous posts. I like the premise (at least as I understood it) of how past demons can haunt someone in the present. I loved the wording, ...

This was the first play I ever wrote, but it's barely recognizable from the first incarnation. Its gone through more revisions then anything else I've written. Problem is, I've been ...

I like it quite a bit. The imagery is great, I see no blatant errors, and it has a powerful meaning. To be frank; the only change I'd suggest is ...

I like it a lot, it is short but of course, that say nothing about the quality. A lot of times, the feeling you get from the poem is most ...

I’m on the verge of dieing. -> dying I’m stuck inside my class I want to burn the dreaded math -> Surely there are more creative means of punishment? And ...

Aside from the occasional spelling/grammar mistake, I really don't like the content. Not so much as a matter of personal preference, but from a playwriting perspective I don't find it ...

My favorite fiction is the Phantom Tollbooth, and I like horses but have never really ridden one. And "smorgasbord" is great word, but I think it sounds better as "smorgishborg". ...

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The Tinfoil Hat The stage should be as uninteresting as it can be, this play takes place in an undisclosed location , somewhere, in the universe. At down-center stage lies ...

The forum speaks for itself doesn't it? I'm new and introducing myself. Cheers!