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  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Demon HourGlass

    Hello SlyNightOwl! I liked this story, it's unique. Nowadays I see too many stories about vampires and other creatures, but Demons is a first. Anyways, I have a few grammar ...

    Jul 6, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Maybe Even Happy

    Hello EmmVeePi! You have a good idea for this story, but I think you should edit your transitions more. For example: Picking the bag up off the counter I lead ...

    Jul 6, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Purple Skies and Tasty Lies

    hey Bulletproof1994! I loved this poem. The name "Purple Skies and Tasty Lies" was interesting, but not in a bad way. That's what got me to click on the story, ...

    Jul 6, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Goodbye Nick (EDITED)

    Hello cuteballetdancer7, I'll start by saying that clearly this must have been a rough patch for you since it was a true story. With that being said, I think you ...

    Jul 2, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: My Falling Sun 4.2

    Hey LittlePrincess! This has peaked my curiosity, even though I haven't read any of your other pieces. I sense a bit of drama going on, you made it very clear ...

    Jul 2, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Cheese, Radios, and Jealousy (contest entry)

    Hello ninjacookiemonster! Well, this was interesting. lol, to tell you the honest truth, I couldn't follow this story at all. There were too many characters that weren't described at all, ...

    Jul 2, 2010
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Smile, Child: Feedback Appreciated

    Hello antoinette! Your story is good, my favorite part was when you said: In fact, I remember that day with stunning clarity. Some people think that you remember the good ...

    Jul 2, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Prologue: Small Mistakes and Big Consequences

    Hello Lilicia! I'm SodapopLunchbox(: In review, your prologue is very good. I'm not gonna lie, I wasn't expecting the end. I was shocked and laughing at the same time. Well, ...

    Jul 1, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Supporting without Support Chp. 1

    Hey LovexPeacexRandomx3! (I love your name btw) I'm SodapopLunchbox with your review(: I'm not going to lie, in the beginning, I was thinking, ugh, another typical theme (no offense) but ...

    Jul 1, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Aquamarine

    Hello Misamiera! I'm SodapopLunchbox, here to review your lovely story. As you could probably tell, I really liked this. Kids these days don't really enjoy quality time with their relatives ...

    Jul 1, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Sins and their Secrets

    Hello UnderestimatedSmiles! This story was awesome!!! Very well written, I enjoyed reading it. I hope that your motivation gets renewed because this is a good story. Its not your typical, ...

    Jun 30, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Stars Are Watching (Chapter2)

    Hello jokeless7jester! I'm Sodapoplunchbox here to review your work(: I'd like to begin by saying I liked this piece. I didn't read your previous chapter, but this is interesting. I ...

    Jun 30, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Note from the addicted

    Hello jjssyy! I see that you are new to YWS. Welcome! I joined a few months ago and I love this website. Anyways, onto the review. You have a knack ...

    Jun 29, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Dakota's Diary, entry from chapter 3 (13+ for language)

    Hello RedSmiles! I'll start by telling you that I have not read your other chapters from this series, so the intro in the beginning helped me. But even without this ...

    Jun 28, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Impulse - Prologue:1 "The Fall of Man"

    Hello prism180! I like the idea you have here about mankind!! But there are a few things I want to point out And you know what...that makes it alot more ...

    Jun 27, 2010


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