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Um, I liked the idea, but I agree with above crits. You did a lot of telling. I also didn't like it how you introduced all of the characters. For ...

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Welcome, welcome...your name is what? Zand...what? Cool name, ninja-z. Anyway, would you mind kindly informing me what the heck NARUTO...is? I've heard so much about it but really have no ...

9/10 Lovely poetry.

LOL!!! Thanks for all the great comments and opinions, y'all. I especially like the Twitty Shadow's little snide moonlight scene. Yeah, you guys were right! I've never actually read a ...

Welcome to the site! Lol, I thought it was amusing, although kind of sloppy. I agree with what Claud said, but again, I was amused. If your purpose was to ...

8/10. Lol. 'nuff said. *sniff sniff* I don't have a gun? why am I the only kid without a gun?

Cheerio, Zane! Or is that...Zaney? lol... Seriously *clears throat and straightens collar* welcome to the site. Feel free to pm me with any questions and I'll answer them. Don't always ...

I've learned that having people critique the first part, or first chapter of your story, is perhaps the best motivation for continuing. I am myself writing a story at the ...

Ahahaha...sounds like you're going to fit riiiight in. I must admit, I am relieved that you are, indeed, a thinker of thoughts. When I first saw that you were a ...

Heello, oh Newbie! Welcome, welcome. I could go into a long soliloque here about the wonders of this great site and how much fun you'll have here...but not wishing to ...

LIked this! Just came from critting your chapter one. Stupid me...I always read the sequel before the original. :P OKay, good. I don't agree about the added intrigue and interest ...

PO-TA-TOES! lol. Hem hem...*clears throat and folds hands in business-like manner.* First of all, I liked your story. It doesn't have too much of a plot in this chapter, but ...

o. m. g. Chills run up and down my spine. Great story! Seriously beautiful, enchanting. Not exactly sure why it's in the romantic forum, but I guess it could be ...

Okay, this is an experiment. I have this plot in my mind for this story...it's supposed to be the most typical romance you could ever read. Based on this first ...