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sounds good!

thanks for the feedback! yeah, this piece is from way back when i didn't know how dialogue tags work, lol. oh, i see what you mean with the flow and ...

thanks for the review :D ohhh i see what you mean about the formatting... ill work on that. glad you enjoyed it! also i love your review style lol

lol thanks XD

XD exactly XP

XD thanks! glad u enjoyed it! =)

XD must be a writer thing lol oh thats a good idea... thanks! :)

guys. this is my everyday life that i just narrated... lol... *crying/laughing*

ok, thanks for the review! yeah, i do agree about the title, i need to find a better one XP

lol glad you liked it! thanks for the review!

thanks for the review! =)

thanks! :) ill see what i can do about the ending

np!

Ohhh that's why Yeah, sry; I meant that I did read it over, but I read it over in the Docs app, copied it here, and didn't bother to read ...

Heyyyy y'all, thanks for reading this! I'm hoping to publish it, but it still needs a lot of work. Please lmk if you see anything that could be made better! ...