starrynight89

Hello, Just came by to drop a review. HOpe you don't mind that I attach my reviews whenever the posts are long. Alrighty, PM me with any questions or concerns. ...

Hello, You seem like a newbie--Welcome to YWS! :) Now, onto your crit: I watched my mother with the most bored expression I could make as she turned a full ...

Hi there, Just wanted to leave a review. Hope you don't mind that I attach my reviews when the posts are long; it's just neater that way :) PM with ...

Part Two cont. In the store there was only a few people. I had been telling the truth about finding a book. I needed to find one by Monday and ...

Hi there! Just stopped by to review. Just PM me if you have any comments, questions or concerns regarding my review!! :) And, you're off to a good start but ...

There you go bigbad! I haven't gotten to chapter Two but I shall post that up when I do. Let me know if you can't open the file for some ...

Hello! I hope you don't mind that I attached your review. You do have Word, right? If not, let me know and I'll try and post it here. Also, PM ...

Prologue: Rain One dark night, as a storm raged overhead, a carriage made its way along the road through the K ingdom of Valeria towards the city. The passenger had ...

It was beautiful and constructed so well. Many times, I have seen poems start out with a theme but defer off track along the way and end up somewhere else. ...

Wow , that's all I can say! It was beautiful and the MC is just a delight to read. I could feel her fury with every line and her mannerisms ...

Hi there, Just thought I'd leave a review..sorry if it isn't up to the mark, I haven't been around yws for a while. I will give you my general thoughts ...

Spacing it better would help...:) ---- I sat there bereft, wondering when it had happened. Good, creative start. I like the opening. When did I fall? And why did it ...

Let me give u a line by line analyis before telling you how I feel about the whole thing. my edits are in bold :) “Steel met bone," "A viscous ...

Yes I agree with mizz-iceberg, this story would flow a lot better, not to mention look better if it's written as a script. I'll do a line by line analysis ...

Hello, back to review more of your story :) First of all even though its short, you'll get a lot of critical reviews because it's short and easy to read ...