sworddance

Hey chosen--love this =D Would I be correct in assuming this is the entire story? As is, I think you have a pretty solid plot and characters, as well as ...

Heya Kaylyn :D fun start--the "past due library books" reminded me of me haha Anyways, it seems like it could be a great start to a vampire story with a ...

Wow hi--I haven't logged on for months and I felt like coming back in a random burst of.. err... critiquie-ness...? so anyway you're my first victim XD I like it ...

Hi!! "\^.^ capital He, please. "he late morning light shone through the trees, speckling their bright scales: Various sharp sounds emerged from their throats, a song without a distinct tune; ...

*falls off chair* So short! And it looks like most of the previous posters did the nitpick of punctuation and shiz, and that's really all I noticed about this section. ...

*pokes head sheepishly around corner* err.... hello. I've been gone rather a long time, haven't I? :oops: I just got back from flipping out at you on another thread because ...

ACK!!!1!!!!!1!!!111!!shift-one!!!!11! OMG I go away for a few months and next thing I know you've deleted it?!?!?!?!!?!?!!?!! :cry: :cry: :cry: :cry: :cry: *sniff* I'll have you know, I came online ...

Heya Jen :D Thanks for the pm. Soon as I got it I scooted over here for this haha So, let's see. I'll do a comb-through, then I'll see if ...

ARG! I got your pm... *sniff* no verdict yet... But hey, this segment's good. Really nice- it shows them more human, I guess. That last line was cool, with the ...

hey JC! Looks like I was remiss for a while- I didn't see you'd posted more >.< Oh the suspense! :D I can't wait to see what happens with the ...

Heya- Jen, right? ...I think that's what it said in your welcome. Feel free to smack me upside the head if I remembered wrong. Anyway, I was just browsing when ...

Heyla hun :D I didn't realize you'd posted a story! >.< and why haven't I read this one already? :evil: anyway- you first shall get my infamous pick-aparts. " “What ...

hey baroness :D I have to ask, before anything else... why does your age suddenly say 46? just so people like me will notice and ask stupid questions? *scratches head ...

Heyla chocoholic :D I'm here for the next part. First of all, I feel obligated to second what you said at the end of your post. 'Tis unfair that you ...

Hiya Pol :D I didn't post on the last chapter because it appeared that you'd already gotten a lot of help on that one, so it would have been kind ...