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thanks ^^^^^

i like it but a bit confuzzled i was the whole idea in the story didnt make sense

this was good but short too short i think it would be a lot better, i feel like you can add more but i like it a lot

aww... this is sweet i love this poem it shows how much you feel for HER whoever SHE is

this wasnt that confsing hahahahahhahhah^ whoops whatev anyway i didnt understand why she died, i think you should change the way she dies and this would be a better story ...

it's too short and i am not a good critque but, i think you should extend it...

it was really great, i almost cried *sniffles =D good job, keep on writing

"As you stumble into the night." it was good, but just one thing, i feel that you dont need this line ,"As you stumble into the night." on the 1st ...

i got really confused from the start it doestn make sense to me and your pattern is way off sooo..... yeah

yeah! first to review, anyway i like this it has a few ryming mistakes in it but its still good keep it up

sorry, in that quote i think you meant , your instead of you and i agree with the person abouve me, this isnt a poem its a diary entry and ...

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hey this is really good lyrics i cant eally figure out how it would sound to a beat though so yeah i think its kinda long but really good and ...

That was stupid and didnt make any sense carly would never date freddie, we all know the characters acted like totally different poeple and yeah i didnt understand it was ...

i love this one but some things i dont understand by the way i love our pictutre so yeah im not very good at crditing so other then that good ...