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The biggest thing I noticed was the spelling mistakes. Here's the list of misspelled words: O - Oh Dam - Damn Strait - Straight Say's - Says ... its not ...

First of all, I'd like to say that I am also trying out a fantasy story for the first time and it is indeed hard. What I noticed about your ...

Will this be a continuing story? If so, I'd be glad to read and edit the next one. There was a couple spelling mistakes, "Specs" = specks. "Thru" = through ...

This is the best short story I've read on this site so far. From beginning to end I was completely engrossed. And I love the way you ended it, very ...

This is quite a different type of writing than I'm use to. It captures the humor of the teen( and ultimately, you) very well. There was only a few mistakes ...

Amazing! The only thing that could be corrected is that in the beginning you used the word nervous a lot. Here are some sentences that I have refined just as ...

Wow, this story is great. I've even tried reading the twilight books and wasn't that interested. I suppose because it seems more grown up and more dark. I can say ...

I'd like to first start off by saying that romance stories are not my area of expertise. Well, honestly I have no "area of expertise" but Romance would definitely be ...

Like Stella said, the space before each dialogue was really irking me. Ha ha. Looks like your previous reviewer got pretty much everything. It was real good for a first ...

Alright, here we go. :smt077 The room was cold, the digital fire, nothing more than hot coals by now. Try this: The room was cold and the fire nothing more ...

Okay, it looks like you fixed a lot of things you were criticized on before so thats good. Let me just point out a few thing that still need some ...

Definitely add a divider between each part, it threw me off the first time i read it. Just a few mistakes: "But truth is? I like his shyness..." You don't ...

This isn't a review for just this piece. I just wanted to say that their are a lot of Sector 33 stories listed by you and maybe you should write ...

That was a wonderful poem. The only thing I would change would be the sentence: "Hope anew comes, " to maybe "Hope comes anew" just so it wont sound so ...

Dang, real great work. My only criticism is probably not important but... heck, I will say it anyway. The cat gave him an irritated look and stalked halfway across the ...