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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Mirror Mirror

    Wow. This was... absolutely amazing. It really captures the darker side of a frightening reality well, but by binding it to something of a hook in that famous line from ...

    May 16, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Awakening

    Overall, this is a really good poem; it conveys the concept rather well. Like Gadi ^^ said, try to avoid the more common cliches, as it sort of detracts from ...

    Feb 24, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Valentine?

    Not much can be said of a crush that I have. It comes and it goes, but It should be known. Why is the "I" capitalized here? If it was ...

    Feb 23, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Dawn

    Wow, this is a very good prologue. It's good how you started it with a metaphor, espeically since it's an interesting one (Pain surged through my body like an angry ...

    Feb 23, 2008
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Snow White (What actually happened)

    This was a really interesting take on the classic fairytale of Snow White. Overall, it was very well done. A few misplaced punctuation here and there, but nothing to major. ...

    Feb 23, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Screaming Underwater.

    Wow, excellent job. It really conveys the emotion well. I espeically like how it rhymes, but in a way that makes sense, not overly posed or anything. It just does. ...

    Feb 23, 2008


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— Jane Austen, Pride and Prejudice