telle_04

Hello. I think this is simple and sweet ( sweet , where'd I get that?), and I love how I can see the effect of the "mourning type weather" in ...

hey. i like this. not much, but there's something about it that attracted me. maybe because it was simple, yet honest and detailed--a compromise, i think--and it was very common, ...

vincent? i'm used to writing lyrics and stuff like that, and i think your poem has a potential for a song. have you tried writing a song? just asking. :D ...

okay so they say dashes drive them mad. me too. i understand that you used the dashes to convey emotion, but honestly, it's not appropriate. i'm also thinking that it ...

hello nightshade. i love the imagery, the details you used, the play of words..beautiful. i wouldn't go nitpicking because i instantly loved it. definitely. there's a dark emotion hidden behind ...

hey rob. nice poem, yeah i think if you can work it with music, it will be a nice song. i have done some lyrics (feel free to visit my ...

hello zan. :) this reminds me of something like a scene from fantasy stories, with myths, legends, prophecies, you name it. i think it's interesting and catchy, but i don't ...

quickreply: hey, silent. this poem makes me feel so nostalgic. nice imagery, and nice play of words. i can't say anything else, because everyone here took the chance. keep writing. ...

hey dark. i won't focus on the grammar and capitalization and punctuation and other errors, because the other reviewers have pointed them out. still, i encourage you to keep writing ...

hi butterfinger. i like it. i love the strong emotions. punctuation and grammar can be easily edited, so no need to focus on that. nice words. keep writing. `telle. :)

hey, rain. :) just a quick reply: maybe you can improve on punctuation and capitalization, but i think the poem was cute just the way it is. and um..i didn't ...

hey undeadbunnie. mind if i sneak around? :) first stanza is good, except for this one: It's the empty feeling inside It's the things I don't confide In you when ...

hello ross. okay. this is a nice song: you've got the emotions poured out, you've spoken with force, with conviction. when i read it, i thought it would be something ...

personally i don't quite get the sense in your poem. well, maybe you intended to confuse, but really.. this piece is quite confusing. i understand it a little. i'm quite ...

We have been rendered senseless hey, ross. i love paramore too, and i love the lyrics you wrote here. wish there could be a way to hear it. :)