theironnovelist

So...this piece is interesting. It's quite relate-able to me, but it has be a bit confused. It sounds so dramatic and morbid, for lack of a better term, and I'm ...

interesting idea here. I'm not sure I'm familiar with your work...but looks like you've written even more poetry than me;) so I just have some general tips: I think, overall, ...

sup bro! I haven't read any other reviews yet so I apologize if I'm repeating any suggestions... " In this life, everyone loves someone. But I will love you even ...

I love where this derived from and your use of language! It stayed very consistent throughout the piece. It's kind of a like a Romeo and Juliet, had Juliet married ...

What an incredible theme here! Really dark, but real and hard-hitting. I love it. Your detail and wording was pretty spot-on for the most part. I particularly love the way ...

This has great potential and I don't have much to say now about nit-picky things. My brain is fried from reviewing today! However, general suggestions: to make this more pleasing ...

Hey there! First off....I know nothing about football. BUT I do love poetry! So I can review this from a writers' standpoint, not a sports fan's. xD sorry Overall the ...

OH MY GOSH YOU CHANGED THE BLEEPING ENDING YOU....! *deep breath* Okay. Calming down now. Some stuff: Instead of having to apologize for the split-beginning xD you could start off ...

Oh well hey! Here's something I didn't notice. You already...revised these...hehe... Coolio. DUDE I LOVE YOUR NEW DESCRIPTION AND DETAIL, ESPECIALLY AT THE BEGINNING It adds almost a touch of ...

Dude I had no idea you were writing short stories!!! Can I just say I love that? It takes me FOREVER to write stuff and you're doing so well! Muy ...

The main reason I don't like lyrics is they're too repetitive and shallow, so I usually turn to poetry. But man did you defy those standards! I love the theme ...

I like that, in spite of the very random happenings in this short story, it all has a general structure. You're very good at letting your characters shine through in ...

I like the imaginative, almost celestial feel of dreaming mixed with spirituality. I'm not much of a lyricist, so here's some general suggestions/questions: Are you adding more to this? I'd ...

Hey there. So some general suggestions: I like that you flesh this out with not overly doing dialogue, but in this case I think you could use even more to ...

I like how your title reels us in, that this must be captivating and informative at the same time. I'm going to give some overall suggestions here: I'm thinking to ...