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  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Crazy, Stupid, Brilliant

    I loved this movie. I thought it was great how Emma and Ryan's characters (I forgot the character names =) didn't have sex the first time. I also loved that ...

    Oct 2, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Chapter One (DRAFT)

    Here at request. :) I'll be marking all my corrections/comments in red. Sitting firmly like a Tudor Love this line. I'm guessing you're referring to the Tudors as in King ...

    Jul 29, 2010
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: Letters from the Front

    I'm sorry I don't have enough time to do a full critic, so I'll quickly point out the main things. I have just got to my post in Ypres. A ...

    Jun 22, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: Charlotte's Hymn part 1

    I have a question, is this about a slave escaping? If so, I would choose a different plot. Slavery is the most used subject of books. That and vampires. If ...

    Jun 10, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: What Else Is There To Say About Hitler?

    I'm not a Jew hater or anything like that, but I find the subject of your poem rather interesting. :) D ays with "perfect" people filling the world, fill his ...

    Jun 10, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: To my friend Nathan a.k.a Nova

    He always talks but doesn't say alot. A lot is two words and also the most horrid adjective of all time. (My teacher taught me to hate 'a lot' in ...

    Jun 2, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Under the Moon

    This stocky yellow cab comes to a halt at the base of this concrete cage, eight staggering stories high and a Metra train wide, as my ears carry me inside ...

    Jun 2, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Nightmares (4 Haiku's)

    Yay! I love reviewing haiku's. :D so deliciously cosy. I'm not too sure how being cosy is delicious. It feels like that you just came up with a "comfort" word ...

    May 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: My Home

    Hello there, Forestqueen! I only have one little nit pick with your poem. Found only in Idaho and India This line would have more force if written like this- "Found ...

    May 13, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Extracurricular Science (Song of Inhuman Boredom)

    With a title like "I Want to Write", I was expecting some immature, novice piece of work. (No offence to any novice who reads this, we all started off as ...

    May 13, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Drift Back To Land

    Very nice. :) I only have one little nit pick. Ripples as I dip in my hand, I think you should add "It" or some type of pronoun to the ...

    May 11, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: ode to my bed

    Hey ichigo! Very well done! Like Jasmine said above me ^^^^^, I love the type of poems that get you thinking it's a love poem (romantically speaking) and it turns ...

    Apr 3, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: White Horse (One-Shot)

    I think Alfreto covered just about everything. I admit, the story was slightly cliche, but it's based off a Taylor Swift song, so I guess it has to be. haha. ...

    Apr 1, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Our Parting

    Great poem, I can really relate to it at this time in my life. Now on to the critique- You ran, as to be aborted, That part sounded very forced, ...

    Mar 29, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: VERY old poem.

    Remember, when you post some of your work you need to review at least 3 (I think, correct me if I'm wrong) other people's work. That does sound very advanced ...

    Mar 6, 2010


The tools of conquest do not necessarily come with bombs and explosions and fallout. There are weapons that are simply thoughts, attitudes, prejudices; to be found only in the minds of men. For the record, prejudices can kill, and suspicions can destroy. A thoughtless, frightened search for a scapegoat has a fallout all of its own.
— Rod Serling, Twilight Zone