tribee91

Hi, I'm guessing your not a winter fan. LOL. I loved the flow of this poem it kind of pulls you in and it has a nice hook in it. ...

Hey every one I have added some one to the story sorry its not edited I still need to fix some of the grammar problems early on in the story ...

WOW........that was Awesome!!!!! I loved the detail and how this story really sucks you in. The mystery of whats happening to the main lady and why it happening. I really ...

.....WOW..... This was totally creepy I think they could make a really good scary movie out of your poem. A really new twist on the hole Drummer Boy that I ...

This is ...... Amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Love this SSSSOOOO much. It really connects with reader and has a lot emotional ties in too. Mostly love the vocabulary usage and how they brought ...

I have to agree with unsocialbutterfly, you did a really good job on this poem. Readers can easily read, understand, and relate or appreciate this. I also can not find ...

I think this is a good start, but lack connection with the reader. If you add just a little more detail or depth to it could be better. Might also ...

I have to agree with StoryWeaver13. It does need more emotion in it but I think this could be a good outline or beginning of a very good poem. For ...

The second block (or paragraph) describes me perfectly. You are very talented for one so young. I am not a good poet, but I have read quite a few. This ...

I can totally relate to this in so many ways. It is hard to believe you just did this spear of the moment, very impulsively I do believe you said ...

this is kinda sad when you think about it..........

You kinda start in the middle of something leaving me a little lost, but defiantly wanting to read more! Can't wait till you write more... there is more right?