vanmahoney

Thanks for the advice. I've edited accordingly. I had written more, but isn't complete, and this was the best stopping place I could find.

[pre] “Sweet Jesus!” The old man’s voice echoed slightly, the kind of echo that lingers on concrete walls. A car had just struck a small child, who was now sprawled ...

Personally, I like the end. It leaves the reader room to imagine what the parents are really like. It was very good, so keep up the good work!

I really like how (at least to me), the ending implies that the cook knows the prince will change his mind and/or not actually go through with it. It was ...