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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: materfamilias

    WOW! Stunning use of imagery and metaphor. I felt like I was discovering new with each line. I have a difficult relationship with both of my parents (I don’t speak ...

    Feb 23, 2021
  • Article / Essay » Fantasy, Realistic Re: A Comparison of Education Between the Multiverses

    I’m rather stunned by the quality of this piece. It’s dense and academic while still remaining entertaining and fun, and I feel that meets the goal of educating its readers ...

    Feb 23, 2021
  • Poetry » General, Health Re: Better Days (two poems)

    Focusing specifically on the First poem, I absolutely love the imagery. I think the gentle personification at the beginning really sets the tone for what you have going on in ...

    Feb 8, 2021
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: i am numb

    Feb 7, 2021
  • Short Story » Realistic, Mystery / Suspense Re: and the snow is falling up into the sky

    You took a well overdone premise and really breathed life into it with this one. I enjoyed this immensely and am definitely going to read more of your work after ...

    Jul 28, 2018
  • Short Story » Spiritual, Dramatic Re: The Frustrated Pastor

    If I ever needed an example of how to perfectly use satire to make poignant commentary on an issue within a culture this is what i would use. As someone ...

    Jul 28, 2018
  • Short Story » Dramatic, General Re: A broken heart

    I love this concept so much!!!!!!1 The suspense of it all really makes me excited to see more from you so I hope you decide to continue this story. With ...

    Jul 28, 2018
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Culture Re: 14 Principles

    I like the premise quite a bit. where I'm caught slightly is the execution. This piece has great potential, but one thing you need to work on is the flow ...

    Jan 8, 2018
  • Short Story » General, Action / Adventure Re: Apples and cinnamon

    with the amount of meticulous imagery in this short it would be safe to assume that you cold describe color to a blind man. I loved this piece a whole ...

    Jan 6, 2018
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Belated Epiphanies

    First off, I REALLY enjoyed this poem. I personally think your word choice expressed a unique voice that complements the subject matter quite well. The flow was good for the ...

    Jan 6, 2018
  • Short Story » General, General Re: New Year

    hey there, right off the bat I am noticing a lack of punctuation, which makes it hard to read and comprehend what is happening. I could have missed it, but ...

    Jan 6, 2018


It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien