writergirl007

I like this, but I don't understand the story! Who does she like? Does she liek the first guy that talks, Ben, David, or Chris? Another thing, you just introduced ...

This is quite interesting. I really like it. But, I do have a lot of suggestions. 1. "her need to seem perfect to keep control was becoming far to excessive." ...

This is an interesting peice. I have never read anything like this. But, I am confused on the plot and the story. Did you have a prologue to this? Just ...

Nice job! I decided to go ahead and edit this tonight! (Or this morning! Whichever.) Hope these help! (Again) XD. 1. "prepare to face the two greatest enemies to his ...

Of course, I must say it is marvelous! I am honered that you would want a young girl's opinion of your amazing work! Lol. I must say, I love the ...

"The cries of a child, a baby, rang out clearly and sharply into the night." Don't use both child and baby. Just one or the other. "The cold air froze ...

This is a sweet poem, but ver cliche. I like the comparison however. I love the bridge idea. I usually like poems that rhyme, which yours doesn't. But that is ...

"Can you believe he made a moveon..." It should be "move on." "Just then a not fell..." It should be note. This was good. I agree, a bit more detail ...

I found a few errors, but nothing major, and I think someone else got them all. :D I thought it was good, a little bit more description might be nice. ...

Hey Scribe! Slow down! And, Jules, they are all this long! Unfortanately! Lol. Jk Scribe. I promise you a longer review! Would you do me a favor, however. I have ...

Hey, Mandy! You write! Yea! I can't wait to read it! I have a prior commitment though! But I promise, i will get to this as soon as possible! Although, ...

This was good Scribe. But I must be honest. It was not as well written as your previous chapters. I also found some very minor mistakes that need to be ...

This is is just really short! No background, no character nothing! So...please lengthen. I do realize, however, you would like everyone's thoughts first. Please elaborate however. As for the story ...

I don't like how you repeatedly say the whoever "in question". Also, add more detail to the story! I can't even understand what's going on! Who are the characters? What ...

This was very good. I was a little surprised. (No offense) Most guys don't write Romantic stories. I have a few critiques for you. "and gaze out the window at ...